UkeCan1
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I'm pretty proud of my new one ... I hope you like it
about all the adventure my wife and I had been on but having a child would be the biggest and best.
Enjoy.
FiL and I were just lamenting how many months in a row (all of them ) we have intended to go to our local songwriter circle, and there's always some other great thing we go to instead ... and then we thought maybe we might need to start our own, at a more convenient time. Maybe this is our answer? A Seasonista songwriter circle right here whenever we have a moment for it!
Alan, I love your song! And "three kinds of sweet tea" is my very favorite line. (Even though I don't really understand it either. Sometimes sound and image matter more than meaning.) Please don't mess with it.
New this morning so really just an idea at the moment,
Dig Another Hole.
Had to use two harmonicas.
Dig another hole
Like a greedy mole
Bring up what is down
Inside out the planet’s gown
Inject and chemically frack
Make those gas rocks crack
Till the water burns and bubbles
Now shouldn’t worry about the future’s troubles
Scrape away the worthless layers
Shove aside the nay sayers
Chop down the last darn tree
Those freakin’ chemicals need to be freed
Wring out those oil filled sands
Modern life has big demands
Ignore the fossil bones you find
That’ll never happen to human kind
Stick a hole in the ocean floor
Suck it all out right to the core
Gotta find those mother lodes
Til the hollow husk implodes
I wrote this one for Myrna's 19th Season of the Ukulele---songs about rivers. I grew up in Twin Falls, Idaho, just a couple miles from the Snake River canyon. My hometown's best known as the site of Evel Kneivel's failed attempt to jump a canyon in a "rocket bike".
This line tripped me up a little for some reason (number of syllables maybe)
Now shouldn’t worry about the future’s troubles
I was wondering about
Without a worry for the future's troubles (?)
Or, if you wanted to point a finger directly just once here
You never care about the future's troubles
or
don't give a s** about the future's troubles
although, I don't know if that says what you mean to say or not.
Autopsies are for dead things Brian. I'm sure Alan and I are trying to help your song breathe more easily and take off for the sky, because it deserves to.
There are some brilliant songs in which the meaning is obscure, (I am the Walrus, anyone?) but the problem here is that the rest of the song is fairly straightforward and flows easily. It's that gown line that just stopped me dead in my tracks and while I was trying to figure it out half the song had gone by without me giving it my full attention. I never did figure it out and only understood it with the "Author's notes" above .
However, if you had rather we didn't comment on your song(s), I'll shut up.
In lovey-dovey, soppy mode.
Wow! I never dreamed we would have this much participation, let alone such wonderful songwriting talent here. I"m going back to listen to all of these tomorrow.
Here's a collaboration between 2 Seasonistas, though (there's another done and one more in the works going in the opposite direction.) Freeda wrote these lyrics as a poem and I tried to make a song from them and added one line at the end.
So, I'm wondering. Are we posting songs here just to share or to get feedback/opinions or both. Perhaps we could indicate what we prefer when we post?? I personally would like the feedback. Even if I didn't agree with it After all everyone has different tastes right?
Autopsies are for dead things Brian. I'm sure Alan and I are trying to help your song breathe more easily and take off for the sky, because it deserves to.
I don't think every thing in song needs to be easily understood.
A lot of songs I really like I don't understand at all.
Under The Milky Way and Unguarded Moment by The Church are two prime examples. I kinda get rifles for eyes but horses for hearts?
I guess the inside out gown also refers to the fact that they are never as careful putting things back how they were as they are getting the stuff out.
Someone very hastily dressed to hide their imperfections.
Like how they "reconstruct" an autopsy cadaver - yes I have been there.
I am starting to feel like my song is having an autopsy
Sorry pal.
I can refrain from making comments, no problem.
I guess I'm just thinking about the kinds of comments I'd like to hear about stuff I've put some effort into, but I should have asked first. This is the kind of stuff I do with the band sometimes and we ignore advice as often as not. Having said that, Bill helped me to rewrite some lyrics from stem to stern lately and Berni and I have collaborated in the past throwing versions and re-writes back and forth and Freeda and I are beginning to do some of the same. BUT I dig that you didn't ask for comments and especially not for suggestions so, apologies.