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carpekd
05-01-2009, 12:54 AM
I'm currently working on my first original.

Got mediafire to work:
http://www.mediafire.com/file/yuwuuw3z22y/firstoriginal.mp3

I just wanted to know what you guys thought of it so far...

JKoval
05-01-2009, 09:04 AM
I did try to download it but it didn't have open slots it said.

seeso
05-01-2009, 10:03 AM
If it's just an mp3, try uploading it to box.net. It's clean and simple. The page will look like this:

http://www.box.net/shared/dla7pocu8n

carpekd
05-01-2009, 10:07 AM
updated the download link...

it should work now

seeso
05-01-2009, 10:12 AM
Sounds good, dude! Sounds kinda 60's-ish to me. You might want to stick a bridge in there after that second chorus instead of another verse, and I don't think you need the final big chorus at the very end. It should end after the slow part.

MattHaaaaa
05-01-2009, 10:16 AM
i like it but agree with seeso deffo a bridge or middle 8 needed
but sound really good i love the intro bit:shaka:

Daionsavage
05-01-2009, 10:21 AM
So far so good. I think you could add either some vocals or a melody line over the chords. ;)

carpekd
05-01-2009, 11:40 AM
Sounds good, dude! Sounds kinda 60's-ish to me. You might want to stick a bridge in there after that second chorus instead of another verse, and I don't think you need the final big chorus at the very end. It should end after the slow part.

Good idea. I was kind of thinking the same thing...


So far so good. I think you could add either some vocals or a melody line over the chords. ;)

The lyrics are still being written. I like to create the instrumental first, and then using whatever emotion it brings me when I listen to it, i write the lyrics.
I plan on adding some backing with other stringed instruments, and maybe some drumming that comes in midway through the song.



but sound really good i love the intro bit:shaka:

Thanks!

I appreciate your comments

DeG
05-01-2009, 12:26 PM
Sounds pretty good to me!

FANaddic(t)
05-01-2009, 04:07 PM
I LIKE it!!!!;)

C-roy
05-01-2009, 05:50 PM
great, had my foot tapping to the beat in a few seconds.

mailman
05-01-2009, 07:04 PM
I like it so far! Leaves wondering about a melody, but I'm sure you'll work it out....

carpekd
05-01-2009, 11:31 PM
great, had my foot tapping to the beat in a few seconds.

your the reason i love to play music!


I like it so far! Leaves wondering about a melody, but I'm sure you'll work it out....

i'm listening to alot of avett brothers right now,,, so i think the lyrics might compare to that when it's done


you guys are too good