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dannyman
11-12-2009, 08:01 PM
hey guys, i write and have written several songs so far, and finished them all without difficulty... this one, however, just doesn't seem to want to be finished. i don't really know where to take the song, and need a way to end it/ make it a little longer...
any suggestions?

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y0NCA5xLVuE
(that link will take you to where i play what i have of the song so far... check out my REAL youtube channel if you want to as well)
thanks for any help!!
:)

C G
hey pretty girl
AM F
you know I want to be
C G
lying here
AM F
with you close to me

C E7-A7
as we intertwine
C F
and forget about time

(SAME PROGRESSION)
when its you I see
I get so incredibly happy
maybe write
a tune on

my ukulele
so I can sing you to sleep


F C G
everyday I take precious time
F C G
to think about you and i'm glad you're mine
F C G
theres an image I can plainly see
F C G
of you lying beside me

(FIRST PROGRESSION)
we go to the beach
I try to kiss you there
irresistibly cute
with sand in your hair

what can I say
you make me feel this way

ukecantdothat
11-13-2009, 09:24 AM
If you can whistle, whistle a solo over that first progression, then write a 4 bar bridge in Am and back into:

(or alternate lyrics)
we go to the beach
I try to kiss you there
irresistibly cute
with sand in your hair

(Then repeat this as your outro)

what can I say
you make me feel this way

what can I say
you make me feel this way

what can I say
you make me feel this way

dannyman
11-16-2009, 05:08 PM
this really helped!
thanks loads!

HoldinCoffee
11-18-2009, 08:27 AM
I really have nothing as far as suggestions... but that was a sweet song! Awesome job!

dannyman
11-22-2009, 09:10 PM
thanks for the compliment, bro!:D

ukeninam
11-23-2009, 09:44 PM
hey guys, i write and have written several songs so far, and finished them all without difficulty... this one, however, just doesn't seem to want to be finished. i don't really know where to take the song, and need a way to end it/ make it a little longer...
any suggestions?

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y0NCA5xLVuE
(that link will take you to where i play what i have of the song so far... check out my REAL youtube channel if you want to as well)
thanks for any help!!
:)

C G
hey pretty girl
AM F
you know I want to be
C G
lying here
AM F
with you close to me

C E7-A7
as we intertwine
C F
and forget about time

(SAME PROGRESSION)
when its you I see
I get so incredibly happy
maybe write
a tune on

my ukulele
so I can sing you to sleep


F C G
everyday I take precious time
F C G
to think about you and i'm glad you're mine
F C G
theres an image I can plainly see
F C G
of you lying beside me

(FIRST PROGRESSION)
we go to the beach
I try to kiss you there
irresistibly cute
with sand in your hair

what can I say
you make me feel this way

Good job danny..i really liked the "as we intertwine" that part is dreamy...hahah

I agree with a whistling part....its very catchy!!

ukecantdothat
11-24-2009, 08:37 PM
Hey, Danny, I forgot to mention, this is a very cool tune, man.:cool: