-You stole my Heart - Need Help and Tips

Well, i just startet to write Songs and find out Melodies by myself.




I dont have a nice Voice at moment =) *cold*

And this is the Result: http://www.mediafire.com/?3n1i88o75277zvg


Please tell me , what you think would be helpful to change.

feel free to give suggestions.



Whats this Song about:

Well i just liked to get everything out. From my Feelings and Thoughts the Text came out.


p.s: sorry for my bad english, im from switzerland.^^ im workin on it.


Lyrics: You stole my heart and youre far away,
we'll see us again, but not today,

do you really care bout me?
Girl i cant believe,

how can such an angel,
wants to stay with me?

i cant stop writing songs about you,
every single of them is telling the truth,

songs about you, about me

songs with you, and those three words

i hold your hand
and you hold mine,
if you let go, please let me know


my heart is yours,
i can not breathe,
if you let go ,if you would leave


you stole my heart, i love your smile,
my hearts stops once in a while,

im miles away, i hope youre fine,
i hope someday i could call your heart mine.