Hard Fall (original) - first draft

Craig Chee · May 28, 2011

A friend thought it would be interesting for me to show first drafts of songs to compare to when I finish them. This song is about 4 hours old and I'm not sure how much of it will stay... I'm already thinking of a slightly different melody. Hope you enjoy! Any ideas are welcome

Aloha,
Craig

V1:
Stay away before I Fall
Between your arms
With nothing else to complicate
There should be more to contemplate

V2:
But I-
Give in to your demands
Cross the swaying bridge
Snatch the gold then flip the switch

Chorus:
And I-
Want to smile
And I-
Do. with. you.

V3:
Make way before I trip
Head over heels
Spinning round and round
I don't know if I'll touch the ground again

*update* added a quick break down of the triplets:

ItsAMeCasey · May 28, 2011

I thought it was really great lol.. I wish I had your voice :/

Craig Chee · May 28, 2011

ItsAMeCasey said:
I thought it was really great lol.. I wish I had your voice :/

Thank you! Songwriting is still fairly new to me (started to dabble with it just a few years ago) and I've been trying to experiment a lot with both vocal and uke melody runs. I think I'll update in a few days with how the song has progressed already!

oh, also, the best advice I got about singing, was to lie on my back, stack a bunch of text books on my stomach, practice breathing by making the whole stack move up and down. Could do it while watching tv or reading a book, and try to imitate that feeling of breathing when you sing... it really helped me!

uke4ia · May 29, 2011

I love those triplet runs.

OldePhart · May 29, 2011

Oh man, you're having way to much fun! Have to agree with uke4ia - those triplet runs make me drool.

BTW, are you sponsored by Fosters or just really like the brew? LOL

John

brucemoffatt · May 29, 2011

Sounds really nice Craig. Thanks for the tip about breathing/singing, although I suspect your secret must have something to do with the size of the Fosters Lager bottle you have there. It does wonders for removing inhibitions.

seriously though, it sounds great.

hannson · May 29, 2011

*stands up* CLAPS!!!!

*walks to fridge to look for Fosters*

Awesome!!!

Craig Chee · May 29, 2011

Hahaha! Thanks guys, I borrowed the huge Fosters bottle because I wanted to do a few photos with before I head down to the Cairns Ukulele Festival... so stoked! Already have some great ideas for harmonies and will update with ver2 soon

*edit - if anyone is interested, i can post some great exercises to work on those triplets (WAY easier than it looks/sounds). let me know!

OldePhart · May 29, 2011

Craig Chee said:
*edit - if anyone is interested, i can post some great exercises to work on those triplets (WAY easier than it looks/sounds). let me know!

Interested! Interested!

John

Craig Chee · Jun 3, 2011

here's a little breakdown of the triplets

uke4ia · Jun 3, 2011

I like that. Thanks. It had sounded like you were fingerpicking every note in the triplets. I didn't think the pull-offs would sound that loud, until I pulled out my uke and tried it.

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