Yet another song writing challenge.....

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Hey folks-

The lack of interest in the other 'collaborative songwriting' threads got me thinking and I remembered a great activity one of my high school literature teachers had us do while studying poetry. I think it is tailor-made for the online forum format.

I'll post the first line of a lyric. Each post should contribute a new line. There are no rules, but I think we should try to keep the meter pretty regular and I always think it's nice when the words to a song rhyme in some fashion.

Please just post one line at a time. Feel free to throw some curve balls. If people actually respond and we come up with something we think is fairly well 'finished', anyone who is interested can take a stab at setting the lyric to music and post an audio or video clip off their version.

I've been working on an "Original Tune A Week" challenge myself, and writing the lyrics is the hardest part for me. It might be nice to get some fresh ideas through collaboration.

I'll start us off in a fresh post so it will be easy to quote and add a line.... in fact, it might be easiest to keep the lyrics going in 'clean' series of posts - any additional comments or conversation might be better off in their own individual posts.

Like I said, I had a high school English class that wrote a few poems like this. The teacher started a sheet going around the room, each student adding a line. Got some pretty interesting results by the end of the period....

Hope you guys are interested - let's have some fun....
 
People moving too fast, I want to go slow
 
Woo-hoo! Someone bit..... thanks, sweetdemise!

When you post a new line, just 'reply with quote' to the last clean lyric post and add your line to the running verse....
EDIT - when you 'reply with quote', I just found out you can't post a quote by itself - you have to add at least ten characters.

I added the new line inside the quote brackets and then threw in '...............' to get the post up to 10 characters....
 
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In the evening time, when the lights are low,
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Only thing I heard, was fiddle and banjo

Just kidding :)

In the evening time, when the lights are low,
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe
 
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that

I accidentally posted at the same time as Doug. I didn't mean to do that, and I like the direction he took it anyway. Here's another two lines.
 
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

It looks like the rhyme scheme is in couplets now... or that could change in a chorus or something... but really this is just to allow the message to be posted. I love this idea by the way. can't wait 'til it's done
 
Ooh yeah, I like the couplet scheme better. Now I feel like maybe the first verse should be changed. Either way, I like how this is going.
 
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free

Maybe the beginning of a chorus? Maybe not...
 
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.

..................
 
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

And random gibberish to fill my ten charactors
 
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Well I'm not sure if you've ever been told
 
think that third verse might make a nice chorus, if we don't come up with something else.....
 
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Well I'm not sure if you've ever been told
If you rush through life, you'll quickly grow old

I really enjoy this bouncing off ideas things
 
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Well I'm not sure if you've ever been told
If you rush through life, you'll quickly grow old
You gotta stop and give a listen whenever you can
 
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Well I'm not sure if you've ever been told
If you rush through life, you'll quickly grow old
You gotta stop and give a listen whenever you can

or you'll regret what you missed when you're an old man
 
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Well I'm not sure if you've ever been told
If you rush through life, you'll quickly grow old
You gotta stop and give a listen whenever you can
or you'll regret what you missed when you're an old man

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Now don't you worry, about a thing

I put in the third verse as a chorus
 
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