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23skidoo
09-15-2011, 02:30 AM
Hey folks-

The lack of interest in the other 'collaborative songwriting' threads got me thinking and I remembered a great activity one of my high school literature teachers had us do while studying poetry. I think it is tailor-made for the online forum format.

I'll post the first line of a lyric. Each post should contribute a new line. There are no rules, but I think we should try to keep the meter pretty regular and I always think it's nice when the words to a song rhyme in some fashion.

Please just post one line at a time. Feel free to throw some curve balls. If people actually respond and we come up with something we think is fairly well 'finished', anyone who is interested can take a stab at setting the lyric to music and post an audio or video clip off their version.

I've been working on an "Original Tune A Week" (http://www.ukuleleunderground.com/forum/showthread.php?50305-23skidoo-s-Weekly-Original) challenge myself, and writing the lyrics is the hardest part for me. It might be nice to get some fresh ideas through collaboration.

I'll start us off in a fresh post so it will be easy to quote and add a line.... in fact, it might be easiest to keep the lyrics going in 'clean' series of posts - any additional comments or conversation might be better off in their own individual posts.

Like I said, I had a high school English class that wrote a few poems like this. The teacher started a sheet going around the room, each student adding a line. Got some pretty interesting results by the end of the period....

Hope you guys are interested - let's have some fun....

23skidoo
09-15-2011, 02:30 AM
In the evening time, when the lights are low,

sweetdemise
09-15-2011, 04:31 AM
People moving too fast, I want to go slow

23skidoo
09-15-2011, 06:56 AM
Woo-hoo! Someone bit..... thanks, sweetdemise!

When you post a new line, just 'reply with quote' to the last clean lyric post and add your line to the running verse....
EDIT - when you 'reply with quote', I just found out you can't post a quote by itself - you have to add at least ten characters.

I added the new line inside the quote brackets and then threw in '...............' to get the post up to 10 characters....

23skidoo
09-15-2011, 06:57 AM
In the evening time, when the lights are low,
People moving too fast, I want to go slow................

nscafe
09-15-2011, 07:22 AM
In the evening time, when the lights are low,
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know

I made a small change to the second line to keep a "five syllable, five syllable" thing going on. Feel free to ignore that, sorry.

Dougf
09-15-2011, 07:53 AM
In the evening time, when the lights are low,
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Only thing I heard, was fiddle and banjo


Just kidding :)


In the evening time, when the lights are low,
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

nscafe
09-15-2011, 10:03 AM
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that

I accidentally posted at the same time as Doug. I didn't mean to do that, and I like the direction he took it anyway. Here's another two lines.

sweetdemise
09-15-2011, 11:05 AM
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear


It looks like the rhyme scheme is in couplets now... or that could change in a chorus or something... but really this is just to allow the message to be posted. I love this idea by the way. can't wait 'til it's done

nscafe
09-15-2011, 11:09 AM
Ooh yeah, I like the couplet scheme better. Now I feel like maybe the first verse should be changed. Either way, I like how this is going.

nscafe
09-15-2011, 11:29 AM
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free

Maybe the beginning of a chorus? Maybe not...

chindog
09-15-2011, 01:25 PM
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.


..................

sweetdemise
09-15-2011, 04:12 PM
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality


And random gibberish to fill my ten charactors

23skidoo
09-15-2011, 04:29 PM
Holy crap - three verses! Curious to see where this goes....

23skidoo
09-16-2011, 02:20 AM
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Well I'm not sure if you've ever been told

23skidoo
09-16-2011, 03:07 AM
think that third verse might make a nice chorus, if we don't come up with something else.....

sweetdemise
09-16-2011, 03:48 AM
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Well I'm not sure if you've ever been told
If you rush through life, you'll quickly grow old

I really enjoy this bouncing off ideas things

23skidoo
09-17-2011, 01:51 PM
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Well I'm not sure if you've ever been told
If you rush through life, you'll quickly grow old
You gotta stop and give a listen whenever you can

chindog
09-17-2011, 02:25 PM
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Well I'm not sure if you've ever been told
If you rush through life, you'll quickly grow old
You gotta stop and give a listen whenever you can

or you'll regret what you missed when you're an old man

sweetdemise
09-18-2011, 07:53 AM
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Well I'm not sure if you've ever been told
If you rush through life, you'll quickly grow old
You gotta stop and give a listen whenever you can
or you'll regret what you missed when you're an old man

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Now don't you worry, about a thing

I put in the third verse as a chorus

chindog
09-18-2011, 01:41 PM
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Well I'm not sure if you've ever been told
If you rush through life, you'll quickly grow old
You gotta stop and give a listen whenever you can
or you'll regret what you missed when you're an old man

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Now don't you worry, about a thing

Turn your heart loose, let your soul sing

coriandre
09-18-2011, 02:01 PM
The world can spin faster than your soul

23skidoo
09-19-2011, 01:44 AM
In the evening time, when the lights are low
People move too fast, I want to go slow
It's been a long day, baby don't you know
Get out my ukulele, sing a song of woe

Sit down on the corner, set out my hat
Sing about this, and a little of that
Everyone rushing, they don't even hear
The sweet melody floating into their ear

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

Well I'm not sure if you've ever been told
If you rush through life, you'll quickly grow old
You gotta stop and give a listen whenever you can
or you'll regret what you missed when you're an old man

Now don't you worry, about a thing
Turn your heart loose, let your soul sing
The world can spin faster than your soul
So hang on tight and just let it roll

Hey there people, now listen to me
Take a load off and set yourself free
You can be you, and I can be me.
Forget your problems, and escape reality

23skidoo
09-19-2011, 01:51 AM
Is this one done? I moved that last verse up, before the second chorus.... Not sure this one needs to be any longer, but feel free to add to it.....

Any one got any ideas on a tune? We should work on some music for it.... I'll try to come up with something and post a video in the next few days - I'd love to see what other folks - even if you didn't contribute any lyrics - come up with as well.....

Any interest in doing another one? Should we start another thread with a new first line?

sweetdemise
09-19-2011, 03:15 AM
Another one would be fun. I'll see if I can come up with a tune for this one. It would kind of fun to compare the different styles we use.

23skidoo
09-19-2011, 04:17 AM
It would kind of fun to compare the different styles we use.

I think so, too.... I think we should feel fee to edit-at-will, as well.... see what we can do with it.....

I'll start another one.....

nscafe
09-19-2011, 02:08 PM
I think this is as done as we're going to get. I really like how this turned out. Maybe I'll even try to come up with some music for it. Crazier things have happened. :)