A friend of mine, who is a music producer, liked my contribution this week, but felt I was being too literal and lost the opening poetry too early on.
So I took his advice and revised the lyrics. This is how Sleepless Too (2)
goes now:
Sleepless Too
My eyes are closed the room is in darkness
Outside the clouds have kept the sky starless.
Behind my lids there are flashes going off.
Blinding white or cobalt blue:
Are they just gravitons passing through?
I long to sleep, but sleep won't take me.
The slightest sound seems to wake me.
I'm bathed in sweat and the morning's coming on.
Storms in my thoughts echoed in thunder
My peace of mind rent asunder
Here and now becoming there and then.
What use now: "I should have said..."?
Remorse and regret tower above my bed.
SOLO & CHORUS
My body's tense - I feel I'm sinking
Swamped by the stress of too much thinking.
Tossing and turning until well past four.
Can't seem to get a moment's peace
How I wish this torture would just cease.